A man was pulled from the flames of his burning house on
Robert Kent, described by San Jose fire Captain Rob Piper as retired and in his 50’s, was found on the kitchen floor of his single-story home unconscious and has suffered second and third-degree burns to 50 percent of his body, said Piper.
The fire began in the kitchen before spreading up to the attic, at which point smoke engulfed the whole house. Captain Piper claimed the fire was reported at
Jason Le Miere
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I'd probably start the lead with "local firefighters" and get rid of passive voice, but other than that it's right on target.
retired and in his 50s (AP Style)
If you say "Captain Piper claimed" it sounds like you don't believe him. Just use says or said for quote attribution.
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