SAN JOSE, Calif-- A week on from the unprecedented attention surrounding the “Little Saigon issue” the San Jose City Council met for their regular Tuesday meeting in an atmosphere that was much more comfortable for members of the council, Madison Nguyen in particular.
The public involvement in the meeting was a far cry from Last Tuesday night when the Vietnamese community packed City Hall to its capacity as regular service resumed-- inside the chambers at least.
The main issue on the agenda was the proposed redevelopment of the Airport West area and the iSTAR development. Included in this was the proposal for a soccer stadium to house the freshly returned San Jose Earthquakes Major League Soccer franchise. The development would see the earthquakes owner … fund the building of the stadium on the proviso that the city government rezones an area of land designated for industrial development to housing instead. The decision rests on whether the council believes that enough money would be made form the soccer stadium to cover the loss in taxes from the industrial area. The presentation by SportsEconomics, LLC included data exalting the financial virtues of having the stadium. The reports were accepted unanimously by the council, however vice-Mayor Cortese urged the planners to formulate back-up plans, “It may be worthwhile to talk about fall back positions just in case we had to transition quickly and move in another direction,” cautioned Cortese.
Also on the agenda were proposals aimed at ending homelessness within 10 years. The Blue Ribbon Commission presented their final report which proposes the city of
Another matter discussed on Tuesday was procedures for forming Community Benefit and Improvement Districts. The proposal is championed by councilmember PierLuigi Oliverio. The procedures would allow businesses in a given area would impose an extra tax on themselves in order to provide extra services in the area. Oliverio explained the benefits of the scheme, “This ordinance would not require city funding and in fact this ordinance would assist
1 comment:
I'm pleased that you covered a city council meeting. Good practice.
You've got some good quotes, and you've crafted smooth transitions to the different segments of your story.
However, your story also has a few problems. Overall, it needs to be tightened up -- too wordy.
Although I can see the appeal of focusing on Little Saigon in your lead, the rest of the story has little to do with this issue or with Madison Nguyen. So I don't think it works very well.
I'd rather see your lead focus on (or at least mention) one or two of the issues actually discussed at the meeting...perhaps the soccer stadium proposal and the homeless issue. Then readers would know what to expect from the rest of the story.
Please shorten your paragraphs -- make them no more than two or three sentences long.
Make each quote its own paragraph. The Reed quote needs work. How about:
“What we’re doing now doesn’t work," said Mayor Chuck Reed, commission co-chair. "We have homeless on a merry go round and it costs a lot more to keep them on that merry go round than it will cost us to end homelessness.”
"Whilst" is not AP style -- use "while" instead.
Avoid using "opinion words" like "exalting" and "virtues." That's also a good example of a paragraph that needs tightening up:
SportsEconomics LLC presented data on the stadium's financial prospects. Their reports were accepted unanimously by the council, however Vice-Mayor Cortese urged the planners to formulate back-up plans.
“It may be worthwhile to talk about fall-back positions," Cortese cautioned, "just in case we had to transition quickly and move in another direction.”
41/40 (B-)
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